Thursday, October 13, 2011

Broken Daddy




Broken Daddy

He is unaware his daddy is gone forever
broken into a million pieces
now only fragments of his life

He is oblivious to why his daddy is gone
broken off from his life
now only missing pieces of a puzzle

He is unknowing of why his daddy left
broken out if time
now only a distant memory


He is forgetful his daddy was really here
broken again from within
now only fleeting time

He is nescient his daddy will never come back
broken from this earth
now only a drifting soul

He is unknowing his daddy is dead
broken forever

Originally written April 8, 2011 for the 100 word challenge.

9 comments:

Morning said...

a ghost father here to look at his baby,

how sad and haunting from the baby's view,
powerful job.

zongrik said...

and this will be a scar he has to bear for life

mylittlewordz said...

A very different take on the picture compared to many. It works very well. Love the use of 'nescient'.
Jamie

keiths ramblings said...

Wow, I wasn't expecting to read a piece like this. Utterly brilliant.

The Noiseless Cuckooclock said...

powerful narrative.

remarkable entry.

Kay said...

This is an extremely impressive write.

Ann LeFlore said...

such a brilliant piece so strong and so well done
http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/17/to-my-son/

Guilie said...

Ouch. Lovely, though. Good use of "broken" throughout. Thank you for (re) sharing.

e.a.s. demers said...

nice take on the prompt... fragile and sad, though not as sad as it could be since the baby isn't aware that his daddy is gone. Well done :-)

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